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Can you put spec work in your book?
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Just checked out your book:
• On mobile the top-left navigation button gets lost within your name and is hard to click. It’s always nice to show the places you worked as well.
• Show the Gatorade Hype video first, it has better language and overall is a better spot, the 5v5 one is very generic with headlines, I might take that one out. I like the visuals of the rest of the Gatorade stuff but doesn’t seem to help you out as a writer. Looks nicely polished though.
• Pepsi work helps you as it’s a manifesto, something every writer will be made to create many times.
• I would take out the Lyft work, seems very generic.
• MTV I wasn’t a huge fan of but worth keeping some of it. Again visually cool as an AD but doesn’t show your strengths as a writer. May cut down some of these as you have a bunch already featured.
• I would remove radio as a senior creative unless it won a Cannes.
I think you should add new work to this to really focus on big ideas. It sucks to hear that, but I think the agencies or clients haven’t let you shine on this aspect as much as you have the ability to. Doing something cool on the side can help build out your book. LA is kinda dry right now too.
I think you have some great talent, you just need to let it shine and make it happen. And don’t be afraid to take a mid-level position too. Good luck!
Haven't had a chance to have a look through the book but that notebook story on your frontpage is amazing
Thanks so much for your detailed review! I will take a lot of your feedback. And regarding the ideas, yes, I have a second website that I send along that has more conceptual work. Thanks so much again for this ❤️ AD2
Also, all gatorade and pepsi I was both the copy and art director.
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Nothing I saw seemed especially copy driven except maybe the Haiti Pepsi spot which didn’t really push too hard and uses the same word or close to it twice in a sentence in a way that was kinda rough Lots of flashy art direction stuff in there, but no real big concepts that I could see. I didn’t have time to look at everything though. Also, you should find another way to host your radio spots. Having to listen through SoundCloud was too much work for me on a phone.
Ok, thanks for your feedback! :)
It’s really discouraging how there’s so many visits to the site but just one comment. I wonder if my work is that bad that nobody wants to share their feedback.
Thank you AD2 :)
Sorry I meant SAD1 ❤️
You should change it to Senior creative instead of Senior copywriter if you wanna do both too.
Yeah I have it like that in my LinkedIn profile. But I’ve read is not a good idea to market yourself like that.